Thursday, November 17, 2011


My Outline
Introduction: This will have my thesis about the effects of the media on our society and how it’s not only the video games that have created this effect on society.

First Paragraph: I will talk about the history of the effects of the media on the society, acknowledging the argument of the effect of violent video games on people.

Second Paragraph: I will begin my argument about the effects of video games focusing on how video games have impacted the society in positive ways.

Third: will focus on the how movies, books, and TV shows have impacted our society focusing on social behaviors that have been impacted from these things.

Fourth: I will talk about the culture that has been created and the effects its having on our society and where I see it going.

Conclusion which will bring all of the argument together.

Tuesday, November 8, 2011

My thesis

Video games are a topic of much debate. Many view them as a negative aspect to society and others feel that they greatly are changing society. Both can agree that it is a multi-billion dollar industry. Video games have a negative effect on our society as they negatively impact and put into jeopardy the success of marriage, college or education, and basic relationships of its users. 

Thursday, October 27, 2011

5 Sources

My five sources that I’m investigating are the following…
  1.     Psychology Among The Saints: The Development of Behavioral Science At Brigham Young University by Bruce L. Brown and Mark Allen. In this paper written it talks about the coming of the behavioral school of psychology and how it affected the students and was incorporated into the Mormon doctrine of the school.
  2.  The Hills Ahead: The Place of Dialogue in the BYU Community by Bruce L. Brown And Warren E. Icke. This paper written talks of the effect of the evolution theory here at BYU. It talks of teachers who taught in such a way as to destroy the faith of the students, even causing most to stop praying. This will be really helpful to my paper as it shows a really good example of a little science destroying faith in God for these students.
  3. Religion and Science by Bertrand Russell is a very good source for coming to know about the issue. He talks about how these two have come to be the arch rivals that they are. He talks of many different specific examples of each attacking the other. 
  4. this website talks of the opinions of Einstein on religion and science. It shows that he was a very religious man and had no real desire to destroy faith.  
  5. makes the point in which there aren’t many divides between science and religion and how the two actually coexist. This will help me get a feel for the other side of the argument.  To allow me to enhance my argument.

Wednesday, October 26, 2011

Issues Topic

What is the issue that I want to address in my issues paper? This is a question I think all of us are thinking about. For me I have been thinking a lot about a topic from another class. That topic is of the effect of science on our belief in God. This comes from a number of places, like my psychology class and from the book Angels and Demons.  I believe that science is like what Francis Bacon said “A little science estranges a man from God. A lot of science brings him back.” Here he shows the basic understanding that science when not seen or understood in a totality will take us further from God, but as we approach this totality we will come back to see and know God. I believe that God has inspired the work of scientist throughout the ages preparing the world for the restoration and the spread of the gospel unto all ends of the earth, but we have gone too far. We have taken this little bit of science and with our “understanding” have declared God to be obsolete, which he is not. It is my goal to show how God has been around always and how we have “estrange[d]” ourselves from him. Anyways tell me what you think.   

Tuesday, October 25, 2011

A reflection on the rhetorical analysis.

For me this was a hard thing to write because I really don’t like choosing the topic that I write about. So the first step of finding a blog to write on was a very hard thing to do for me. After that it was significantly easier to continue. I did however really enjoy trying to find out the different rhetorical tools that the author was used to influence the audience and push his point of view. This was fun to see how the different styles of rhetoric can make and influence on logos, pathos, or ethos and often a mixture of the three. Overall I felt it was a very productive experience and has helped me a lot in my writing and gaining ideas for my next paper.

Monday, October 24, 2011

Heaps vs. Nelson

All those who have been following BYU’s football season this year have felt a sense of failure and frustration and a need for a change at the quarterback position as the season has played out through the first five games. Sophomore Jake Heaps entered the season with the hopes and dreams of thousands of BYU football fans placed squarely on his shoulders.  Expectations were high, and people felt that a BCS bowl invitation was a realistic goal. After all, virtually the entire receiving corps and a strong and experience group of running backs returned from last year; it seemed the year to do it, to emphatically declare BYUs independence and to seek the national championship.  
Riley Nelson
But now we have a record of 3-2 with one of the worst offenses in the game, so what happened? Most who have been closely following the team would agree that much of the blame should fall to Heaps, the so called “General of the Team”, especially after backup Riley Nelson replaced Heaps midway through the third quarter of the Utah State game and engineered two touchdown drives to secure a last-second comeback victory. Nelson’s play clearly energized the team, which seemed to play harder and began to make the kinds of plays that had been expected when the season began.
Jake Heaps
After the game most fans and analysts were quick to anoint Nelson as the new starter, relegating Heaps to second string. However Gordon Monson, a blogger for the Salt Lake Tribune, in his blog post “Monson: Jake Heaps still the best option at QB for BYU”, argues that Heaps should be left in the commander’s position and by using clever phrasing with mainly diction, logical proof and an analogy to explain this to all BYU fans and those others who are involved in the quarterback debate.
When I first read this blog I thought Monson was illogical and just playing the devil’s advocate, trying to “stir the pot” a little, because anyone who was watching or following BYU football knew that the team needed a change at the quarterback position. Many already feel that the season is a bust after BYU lost two games and scraped out a couple of wins against teams who are… well, not the strongest teams, to put it nicely. But after reading the blog again I found his arguments interesting and effective, with his subtle rhetoric connecting with his audience as he lays out logical points while controlling the emotions of the reader.
            The first thing that Monson uses diction, is in what he is saying to establish his credibility and to begin to change the reader’s thinking. Using diction with a little imagery Monson does a good job of appealing to the emotions and controlling the negative emotions of the readers. Monson understands that football fans are passionate, and that this is a highly emotional issue, and uses this to his advantage to connect with his audience. In this passage he is quick to acknowledge that there is a problem so that his readers know that he “gets it” …
“For whatever reasons, Heaps right now is lost in a fog. He has the better arm, the better upside, the better form. But he has backed up in his progression. Nearly everyone, myself included, mistakenly thought this season was his time to step into the role of a confident passer, to take control of an offense that seemed perfectly suited for him.”
Here Monson uses the subtle imagery of Heaps being in a fog and so a little lost. This is an appeal to have the readers feel a little bad for Heaps and how bad he is doing. This puts the readers in a new position as they aren’t now looking at Heaps as the perpetrator but more as the victim, trying to make the reader feel a little bad for Heaps. Here Monson puts himself in the story, he knows that Heaps is not doing well, which everyone already knows, and he makes no effort to to argue otherwise.  Yet even as he admits the obvious he plants seeds for his real argument by subtly reminding people of the potential, “better upside”, Heaps has and that Heaps’ performance has not always been bad, “better arm”, – every serious fan knows that Heaps’ arm salvaged the season last year and that there was good reason for the high expectations which he faced this year.  So Monson gains credibility in the eyes of the readers by stating the popular emotional argument, and then subtly moves on to the logical arguments that he will use to show that the emotional argument is wrong.
After gaining this trust Monson uses clever diction (word choice) and proof to appeal to the logic of the reader: 
 “Point is, the team has not rallied, does not rally around Heaps. For weeks, players in the program have whispered complaints about the sophomore’s immaturity.
When Nelson entered, the blocking was better, the effort was better, the results were better. Does that make him a better quarterback?
That’s the irony. He is not.”
This is great word choice, or diction, for Monson’s argument. He logically shows through this word choice that the losses and the failing was a team problem as well as a quarterback problem. Monson shows how Heaps seemed to be alone on the team and the difference in the team as Nelson stepped in. This is an appeal to the reader’s emotions, making the reader feel bad for Heaps, who has not been given the full support of the team nor their best efforts. The logical, unwritten question that then comes into the mind of each reader is whether Heaps would have succeeded if the team had played the same way with Heaps as they played with Nelson? This then sets up Monson’s main point – that Nelson is not the better quarterback – and that Heaps should remain as BYU’s starting quarterback.
At this point, readers are revisiting the opinion that they had before they read the article, so Monson uses more diction and quotes to help the reader come to his same conclusion:
“Nelson thrived in chaos against Utah State. Give good teams a chance to prepare for him and the Cougar offense would continue to struggle. Fortunately for BYU, there aren’t many good teams left on its schedule.”
Here Monson appeals to the logic of the reader by pointing out that Utah State had prepared to face Jake Heaps and were not prepared for Nelson’s specific skills, so a large part of Nelson’s success was that he was able to use this element of surprise to his great benefit.  Yet future good opponents with the time to prepare will be ready to stop Nelson and then Heaps’ skills will be needed and provide the greater chance of success.  Reader’s will remember that it was Nelson who struggled last year and that it was Heaps who was the shining beam of hope. Overall the logical part of this argument is strong and effective in moving the reader from the emotion of the thrilling Nelson-orchestrated comeback to a logical consideration of which quarterback has the most potential for long-term success. By this point, I suspect that many readers are being persuaded to join the side of the author.
            The last use of rhetoric that the author uses is an analogy of a General leading an army (and in football the quarterback is the General):
“Those who say the quarterback position should be the same as any other — whoever plays the best, in this case, whoever moves the offense in any given moment or any series of moments, should be the starter.
That’s what you do at linebacker or right tackle or left defensive end. It’s not what you do at quarterback. You replace sergeants and lieutenants, as though they were spark plugs and oil filters, but you don’t sack your general, you don’t switch out supreme commanders like you rotate your Michelins, depending on momentary results.”
Here Monson uses the analogy of not changing “commanders” to argue that Heaps should still stay the “General” of team even after a couple of lost “battles”. This has a positive effect on the readers causing them to think of past wars and how - even when the war didn’t start out too well - it would have been much worse to have switched the generals in the middle of the war. Most readers will understand this analogy, knowing that most wars consist of many battles, and that some battles may be lost yet the war is ultimately won. It is an effective argument and will move some undecided readers to agree with Monson’s argument.
In the final paragraphs of Monson’s topic he revisits his key points and offers a solution of how to save the season, appealing one last time with diction to logically persuade his readers of his argument. Monson specifically reminds the readers of the similar issue from last season as he appeals to both emotion and logic…
“It’s not an easy decision for Mendenhall, but not deciding is the worst plan he could follow, just like it was a year ago…
Still, the worst thing Mendenhall can do is waffle. He must show leadership and be decisive and make a decision that makes real sense. On Monday, he said a starter would not yet be named. That might work for confusing San Jose State, but if he confuses his players, as well, that’s trouble. He also said he would prefer to avoid a repeat of last year’s mistake.
Based on talent, Heaps should be the guy, and Nelson a situational Plan B, but only in very limited doses. Mendenhall somehow has to channel Dr. Freud and rearrange the mess in Heaps’ head. That’s the best solution; it’s the only lasting solution, to an offense in huge need of repair.”
This in the end, this is the last appeal to both the logic and to the emotion of the audience who will remember last season and who will not want to have history repeat itself; but at the same time reminding the reader of the saving grace of the quarterback last year who salvaged the season and led us to a bowl game - and that quarterback was named Heaps and not Nelson.
            Overall Monson does a good job of appealing to both the logic and emotion of an emotional and passionate target audience, and of building his reputation as a calm, dispassionate voice of reason for this subject. Through diction, an analogy and logical examples, Monson sways the opinions of the readers and puts forth a strong argument that allows him to accomplish his purpose, which is to get the reader to reconsider the popular opinion and reach the same conclusion as Monson.  That conclusion is that Heaps – despite a couple of lost battles - should be our “general” to lead us through this “Holy War”.

Thursday, October 20, 2011

Peer Review for better or worse

As of yet we have had two different peer review sessions, one for the opinion editorial and the other for this rhetoric analysis paper. Each was a little different. The first was a one on one system in which we had a partner to read our papers in class and give us feedback. The second was a group project in which people had time to look at it before and then come to class with ideas to help the person out. For me I thought that the second method worked out better.
                The main reason was that as a homework assignment people were forced to read the papers before the class. This allow for deeper involvement in the paper, better feedback, and a chance to test your paper on a real audience. I felt better feedback from more people than just from the one person who read it in class with me.  
                There is also the fact that this couldn’t have helped in all situations as I’m some didn’t look at the paper with enough detail to really make a difference.  The thought though is what counts and someone who actually read the paper before can make a much bigger difference in these papers.