Tuesday, October 18, 2011

The Perfect Paragraph


            The first thing that he uses is imagery followed by a logical argument. Using this imagery he controls the emotions of the audience.  He understands this is an emotional issue, and uses this to his advantage to connect with his audience in a really nice way. In this passage he appeals to the other side of the argument with this…
“For whatever reasons, Heaps right now is lost in a fog. He has the better arm, the better upside, the better form. But he has backed up in his progression. Nearly everyone, myself included, mistakenly thought this season was his time to step into the role of a confident passer, to take control of an offense that seemed perfectly suited for him.”
Here he puts himself in the story, he shows that Heaps is not doing well, what everyone already knows, which he doesn’t denied  and shows that once upon a time he also thought the same way as most readers are feeling; that heaps needs to be benched. He shows this to appeal and gain the trust of the reader.  With this he puts the reader off guard and gains respect as an author which will open the opinions and the minds of the reader.  This was a very good strategy which will allow him to slowly move his opinion more freely.

Thursday, October 13, 2011

Metaphor

“That’s what you do at linebacker or right tackle or left defensive end. It’s not what you do at quarterback. You replace sergeants and lieutenants, as though they were spark plugs and oil filters, but you don’t sack your general, you don’t switch out supreme commanders like you rotate your Michelins, depending on momentary results.”



Here the author is using a metaphor about Jake Heaps being a General and not a “sergeants and lieutenants”. The author uses this here to appeal to reader for a logical argument about war. The reader is invited to think about a war and how you don’t trade a general every time he loses.  A reader might think of George Washington who also had problems, so what would have happened if he had been take out early in the war? So with this appeal the author invites the reader to think if really changing the so called “general Heaps” as the right move. This is very effective as a reader will think that maybe it’s not such a good idea to call for the resignation of the general after just a couple bad battles. This metaphor is very effective in invoking this logical argument.

Thursday, October 6, 2011

The analysis

The blog that I choose to analyze is http://www.sltrib.com/sltrib/cougars/52671776-88/nelson-heaps-mendenhall-byu.html.csp?page=1. Here Gorden Monson is ineffective in a dressing BYU fans and coach Mendenhall about how Heaps should still be starting quarterback, because of the use of irrational arguments, illogical arguments and examples that really don't have to much to do with the topic.

Tuesday, October 4, 2011

Poetry...its been a while


Today I had the opportunity to listen to a two time Pulitzer Prize winner W.W Merwin who addressed some of the BYU students today. During this time we were entreated to hear some of his favorite poems. This was a treat but also at the same time really deep. He explained a little of the background on each of those poems. It’s been quite a long time since I have heard poetry so I was a little rusty on the meanings behind the poems. But there was a couple that really stood out to me., and I would like to talk about them.
                Sadly I got the name of almost all the poems except one which is actually the one I liked. It talked of two friends. They were talking about the relationship that one had with his father. I assumed the father had died as the tone of the poem was of remorse for not having been a better son. This made me think a lot about not just how im doing as a son but as a brother, friend, grandson and the other titles in my life. This was a really nice poem.
                The other I really liked was the first poem entitled Summer, which talked of relationship we have with the great world or otherwise known as the natural world that we have been invited to take care of and have a stewardship. But also it had a line I really liked that when more or less like this “Islands are not forever nor this sun again”. This speaks to the knowledge of that these moments will never come back. We don’t have second chances, we don’t get time back, we must use this time to the best we can. We will never have these moments again, so that poem to me was a silent pleading of taking in the moments we have.
                I really enjoyed these readings, as it allowed me to examine myself and enjoy some good poetry, which I’ll admit it, which I’m, a sucker for.

Friday, September 30, 2011

Blogs

The blog I'm looking at to write about is this one...
http://www.foreignpolicy.com/articles/2011/09/28/Xbox_general?page=0,4

The response to the 4 questions are here...

In this blog the author is trying to show the development of the US government and military towards the war in Iraq.

The tools that this author uses is a lot of imagery. He has some pictures that show how the game works. And he also uses his experience playing the game.

These tools help the reader to experience the writers thought process and opinion. It helps you see a new soft side of the issue that I think most have not seen before.

He needs the audience to see a new side of the military and to create an understanding with the military not yet achieved. He shows how the military has changed and how they are trying this new thing. This will hopefully improve the public feeling towards the war in Iraq and the military.
I like this blog post as it shows a new side of the Military that I haven't ever seen.

Wednesday, September 28, 2011

My reflections on the Op-ed

I really enjoyed writing this piece as I felt that I was able to share my voice with others about an issue that I really feel passionate about. My only regret on this was that I was not able to write the op-ed how I wanted because I know that I needed to address my audience in a more formal way then I really wanted to. If I could go back I would write the paper with more focused view of my audience being the students and not the police. This is because I am a sarcastic person and I like to use sarcasm in my papers but have the police take me seriously I had to be formal, which was kind of a letdown. But overall I feel that it was a really fun experience that challenged me. I had a lot of fun going to the writing center as they helped me a lot. Another fun thing was this was my first English paper after my mission so it was interesting trying to remember English.  So, overall this was a fun experience.

Thursday, September 22, 2011

Parking: Why It’s Important

                Everyone loves their car. A lot of people see their car as an extension of their personality, and because of this are very protective of their car.  I’m one of those people.  I really like my car, and I want to drive it everywhere I can.  But there is one place where I am always reluctant to drive. That place is Provo, home to a long-standing war between parking enforcement personnel and BYU and UVU students. I address my paper to the Provo police and other parking enforcers who, I hope, will be willing to listen to my suggestions and gain a better understanding of the students’ views on this sensitive topic.  The result, I believe, would be fewer tickets and better relations between the parking enforcement personnel and the community they serve.  

With this issue parking enforcers stand at one end, diligently trying to fulfill their jobs to the highest degree possible. They understand the laws and regulations that govern parking in the city, and are trying to enforce them to keep the city streets orderly and safe.  The enforcement tools are tickets and towing, and the belief that without enforcement parking would soon become unmanageable and unsafe. Without tickets and towing, what would stop students from parking in an unsafe manner or in spaces that are rightly reserved for faculty and staff, for business use, and for people who are paying to live in apartments? Thus enforcers view the tickets and tows as a good thing because this enforces the rules and punishes offenders, while helping to maintain an orderly society.  This is all true. I understand and acknowledge the essential role that they play in maintaining order and ensuring safety.  But there is a better way to achieve that same goal. But before I describe it, I think we need to consider the other side of the story – the students’ side.

Parking is a touchy subject for many BYU and UVU students and Provo residents because many have been with what they see as unfair or excessively picky parking tickets.  It seems like almost everyone at BYU has a story about someone receiving a parking ticket, or a boot, or a tow for a very minor infraction. Many of these infractions were committed unintentionally because the driver was not familiar with the often confusing rules of parking enforcement in Provo. Let me share a few of those stories.  One friend’s car sat in a parking spot that was one parking spot out of his apartment building’s allocation.  He lives in an apartment that shares a parking lot with other houses, and each apartment or house uses a different parking sticker and is allocated a certain number of parking spaces. The spaces aren’t well marked, and my friend, who didn’t know he was doing anything wrong, parked his car one spot outside the limit of his apartment. During the night his car was towed, costing him one hundred and fifty dollars plus the time and stress involved in getting his car back.  Several friends have been cited for parking more than 12 inches away from the curb, which appears to be the infraction of choice among some parking enforcers. My brother was cited for parking over the line of the parking space on a Sunday when he was rushing and late for church.  The lot was mostly empty, so he was not denying anyone space to park.  Another friend’s car was towed for parking on a street where parking was not allowed between midnight and six AM, a fact that was unknown to him since there was no sign posted on the street where he had parked.  He later discovered that the parking restriction was only noted on a small sign at the entrance to the subdivision.  Other friends have been towed for parking at a certain restaurant after hours, mistakenly assuming that the “customer only” restrictions on a lot wouldn’t need to be enforced when the restaurant is closed. These are just a few of the countless examples where students were ticketed or towed for what they see as petty, harmless and unintentional parking infractions.      

Of course, in the examples described previously, all the people that were cited were, technically, in the wrong. These may not have been major infractions, but they were true parking violations. My friend was taking up a spot that someone else had paid for and was expecting to use.  My brother was parking out of the lines.  My friend’s car was on a street where there was no overnight parking, and my friends were parking in a “customers only” lot.   So really, weren’t the parking enforcement personnel just doing their jobs? But why is it always a ticket? Why can’t there be a warning for minor, first time infractions? When my brother parked a touch outside the lines in a nearly-empty lot, couldn’t the point have been made with a simple warning? Wouldn’t this accomplish the same thing – getting him to be more careful next time – but without costing him a lot of money?



Like my friend here who has to pay three parking tickets for failing to park within three inches of the curb.





So what is the “better way” I referred to for solving Provo’s parking problems? Parking enforcers should give warnings for minor infractions and for most first time offenses. Cut them a break.  Students deserve an understanding of parking regulations which is their right and the opportunity to focus on the more important things of life that will determine their future. After all, most students are in the “starving students” category, and the money paid on tickets and towing will be a large part of their monthly budget and will make a difference in their lives. Being ticketed or towed is a fear all students with cars live with, but using warnings would alert students to the rules and generate a more favorable opinion of the police in the eyes of the students.  Also, after getting off with a warning, most students would learn and be much more careful the next time when they would be risking a ticket.  Of course, for repeat offenders or for violations that are flagrant or truly harming someone or causing an unsafe condition, then a ticket should be issued. We understand the need for rules and for consequences when those rules are knowingly broken and we fully support the police in these situations.  We want a safe and orderly society.  But what we ask for is a little more mercy and understanding, and some patience in helping students learn the rules. Giving out warnings on the first violation is a perfect example of this. This will truly help to solve the parking problem, promote awareness of the laws, and in the end create a better atmosphere for all of us to enjoy together.  

We do acknowledge and appreciate the efforts of the police in promoting awareness of the rules which is found here: https://police.byu.edu/content/parking-services-general-information